“Passionate people are the only advocates which always persuade. The simplest man with passion will be more persuasive than the most eloquent without.”
~Francois de La Rochefoucauld

When I interviewed the executive director of an environmental organization recently, he was extremely eager to give me statistics about Congressional budgeting as it relates to the environment and to talk about specific legislation winding its way through Congress – down to the subcommittees and staffers involved. I think we can all agree that only the most wonky among us have that level of interest in environmental legislation.

So I asked him why he cared so much. There must be a reason he was willing to delve so deeply into the minutiae of the legislative process on this one issue, right? It took him a few minutes to shift gears, but once he did, he talked about what prompted him to become an environmentalist, his outrage at what he sees as the immoral way government is spending taxpayer money, and his fears for the future of humanity if we ignore Global Warming.

In just a few minutes, we went from a dry fact piece about Congressional spending on the environment, to a Control-tying acquisition letter based on an impassioned plea for moral and humane fiscal decisions.

It’s easy to get caught up in the facts about what you’re doing – and for a lot of people working in nonprofits, people who face desperate circumstances every day as a part of their job, it’s an important method of self-preservation. But when you’re trying to get people to support your mission, you have to be able to recreate that initial surge of passion. Because all the facts in the world won’t get you as much support as one good, emotion-driven story.

This is where that old writing rule “Show, Don’t Tell” comes in.

Need an Example?

It’s easy to tell your story like this: “Every week we see more than 50 homeless, often ill, dogs come into our shelter. And tragically, fewer than 20% of those are adopted. As our canine population grows, our needs grow, too, and today, we’re facing a crisis situation. We urgently need an infusion of $XX to house, feed and care for the dogs we currently have and those we expect in the next few weeks.”

You’ve got the numbers, it’s pretty emotional, and your core group of donors will probably respond.

But consider this approach: “Zoe cowered in the back of her dog carrier, shaking. I looked at her check-in sheet: She’d been abused in her previous home, and she suffered from malnutrition and a bad case of fleas. I got down on the floor, my eyes fixed on her big brown beauties, and coaxed her forward. It took a while, but eventually, she scooted out of her carrier, calmed her shaking, and placed her head trustingly in my lap. One small triumph…that will be replayed more than 50 times this week. You can help Zoe – and all the dogs of XX shelter – make this challenging transition…”

Who can resist a pitch like that? By painting the picture of one dog the shelter has helped, you give your donor the chance to feel like they are there with you. What’s more, this approach breaks down an overwhelming problem – 50 dogs a week that need homes – into a small, do-able task. They may not be able to help every dog that needs them, but they can help this ONE dog.

Very few people dive into the nonprofit world without having some passion. So don’t forget why you chose nonprofit work in the first place. Communicate that in your fundraising, and you’ll find others flocking to your organization as well.

 

The other day, one of my Twitter pals — Kevin Monroe from X Factor Consulting – asked me what copywriting tips I like to share with fellow consultants. It wasn’t something I’d actually considered much before he asked, since a) I work in my kitchen and b) I’m usually on the receiving end of writing advice.

But his question did touch on something that I have been thinking about off and on over the last couple of years. During the course of my 14-year copywriting career, I’ve dabbled in other kinds of writing, including publishing several feature articles and neighborhood profiles in The Oregonian and having a short story appear in VoiceCatcher.

During times when multiple deadlines were looming, I wondered if that moonlighting was hurting my main money-making endeavor, and I have downplayed my extracurricular writing in my professional life.  But I now think all that second-guessing was a mistake.

In fact, I think one of the reasons I have been so successful in my copywriting is because I have a richer web of writing experience to pull from.

Fight the formula

I have written hundreds of direct mail letters, and there is definitely a formula for the successful ones. But in following a formula you should never become formulaic. The minute you do, the letters you pen become stale, lacking the passion and verve that are absolutely necessary to convince people to give their money to your cause.

When I feel myself treading an all-too-familiar path in my copywriting, I know it’s time to fight the formula. So I take another look with my fiction-writer’s glasses on. Are there themes I can weave through this letter more effectively? Is there a character begging to leap off the page?

Then I put on my features-writer glasses. How can I make my descriptions more vivid? Are there sights, sounds, tastes and smells that would make the issues in this letter come alive for the reader? Perhaps I’m rambling and need to tighten everything up with a journalist’s editing eye.

Let’s face it, there is a LOT of writing advice out there, and good writing is good writing, whether you’re penning a direct mail letter, a slick advertisement, or the Great American Novel. Sure, there are degrees, but the rules are the same: use action verbs, aim for clarity, be as specific as you can, tickle all the senses…

But knowing the rules and using them well are two different things.

Tap into a different part of your brain!

Try writing poetry to hone your ability to use imagery to make a point. Write a short story to put yourself in a different person’s shoes and sharpen your storytelling. Become a blogger to learn how to encapsulate big ideas and personal feelings in 500 words. Try your hand at literary criticism or movie reviews to learn how to identify weak spots in your writing and in others’.

Above all, love writing, all writing. Play with language, revel in how words get put together, rejoice in how they can connect, inspire, educate, and move.

And don’t just write. Read! Starting with this article about the business benefits — it’s scientific, people! — of reading fiction.

 

Young or old, we all like a good story!

 

You’ve no doubt heard about the importance of storytelling to nonprofits. As a writer with an English Lit. degree, I love a good story, and one of the best parts about my job is uncovering those stories and sharing them with my clients’ donors.

But what makes a good story? And how do you tell your story in a way that moves your donors to give?

A Story Has a Destination

A story can be as simple as “I went to the store. I bought three grapefruit. I returned home.” But how inspiring is that?

You want your story to arc from the kernel that starts it all, through the challenges in the middle, to a satisfying resolution. Once you’ve written your story, you should be able to point to each section and see how the details you’ve chosen propel the reader forward.

Your story should always arrive somewhere. Most of the time, this destination will be different from the place you started, but sometimes you’ll end up in the same place you began. Either way is fine, but there must be some destination.

A Story Has Significance

When you arrive at your story’s destination, it means something. A lesson was learned, a decision was made, an epiphany occurred — something about your destination offers your audience some true, deep knowledge they didn’t have at the beginning.

For most nonprofit organizations, the stories will often be about how your work helped a person. So when you’re telling that story, think about how your work impacted that person’s life. What would have happened without your intervention? How were minds and hearts opened? Ask your reader to imagine what would happen if this story were repeated with other people.

What does it mean that your organization exists?

A Story Helps Us Understand Our World

Since the beginning of time, people have been telling stories as a way of explaining the unexplainable in our world. You can harness this power in your own storytelling.

One good story explains who your organization is helping, what innovative tools you’re using, why your organization’s mission is important, how you’re using your resources to make a difference, and how your donors can help. A well crafted story will give your donors everything they need to understand why they should give to you.

A Story Helps Create Community

Doubt the power of a good story to unite us? Consider the Twilight phenomenon.

When you knock it out of the park, your story will get read and passed around…it will get noticed. And those who notice it will have that bond that comes from shared experience and understanding. Telling the stories of the work you do to your donors is one of the most effective ways to connect your donors to your organization and keep them giving for years to come.

Stories have power, and the better you learn to tell them the more power you’ll have.

Check out the Mercy Corps blog for great examples of nonprofit storytelling. And if you want more on the art of storytelling, I loved this article from Jane Friedman’s blog.

Nov 212011
 

This fall has been a whirlwind of activity — from kids’ school and soccer, to a husband in grad school, and a work load that threatened to bury me in direct mail. There were more than a few moments I wasn’t sure how much longer I could keep up the pace.

A friend of mine once told me that if you work for a nonprofit, you will always have work on your desk and exhaustion in your bones.

And these days, when more organizations are trying to meet increased need with decreased resources, I think that’s more true than ever. If you don’t find a few moments during the year to remember why you do what you do, you’ll go bonkers…or worse, burn out completely.

So now that I have a light, short week in which to take a breath and reflect, I want to jot down a few of the things I’m thankful for…things I haven’t been able to see amidst the deluge of responsibilities this past few months.

  • Clients who consistently surprise and delight me. It is so much easier to endure crunch time with people who appreciate what we’re trying to accomplish and who collaborate fully and openly. What a treat!
  • Family support. Even my four-year-old knows when Mama needs a break, and my husband and three children are my biggest caretakers…and biggest fans.
  • Friends and neighbors who step up, no questions asked. Whether it’s providing emergency child care, donating a hot meal, helping me network, or volunteering to proofread my latest letter, these people have my back!
  • Work that I believe in. One of the best things about my job is being able to channel my creativity into efforts that make the world a better place to live.
  • Connectivity. I’m old enough to remember how cumbersome working at home used to be, and I’m thankful every single day for the tools that allow me to work with people all over the world from a corner of my kitchen.

There are, of course, many other things I’m thankful for — my home, my town, my good health, the bottle of wine on my counter, peppermint jojos from Trader Joe’s, and more. But those are the biggies.

Try to take a moment this week to think about what makes you thankful in your job and in your life. Colleagues? Donors? Small successes or huge triumphs?

Nonprofits are busy places at year’s end, and sometimes the only way to make it to the other side is to remember what keeps you going. So, what are you thankful for this year?

Angling for donors

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Jul 182011
 

It's hard work reeling in donors. Don't leave the fishing to amateurs.

The other day, I overheard a development professional I know telling a potential client, “I like to let board members have input into all direct mail copy.”

My alarm bells went off, and I wanted to jump in and offer all sorts of unsolicited opinions about that. But instead, I decided I’d just save them for you.

Now, he went on to explain that he likes to involve board members so they have buy-in to the direct mail program — a sort of “We’re all in this together, folks!” idea. I am all for inclusion and board buy-in.

In fact, I believe wholeheartedly that everyone involved in your organization, from the board president to the once-a-month volunteer, should know what’s going on in the organization and be able to communicate that.

But.

A few years ago, I wrote a letter for an organization run by a very respected, very intelligent scientist. He was widely published in prominent scientific journals and national newspapers and magazines. He was a great writer, and he hated the letter I wrote for them. Ripped it to shreds. He deplored the overly emotional tone and the use of 2nd person point-of-view. He was adamant that his donors would see through such a hackneyed ask and leave the organization in droves.

Naturally, I was upset. I had worked extremely hard getting the complex technical details in the appeal right and melding those with the kind of impassioned, personal plea I know works in direct mail.

The development staff and I sat down and discussed how to proceed, and eventually, we convinced the executive director to test his approach vs. my approach. The results were definitive in my favor.

Now, this guy was a Ph.D. He had a couple of decades of experience in writing about his subject on me. But he didn’t — at that time — know direct mail at all.

Unless your board members — or other people you’re asking to read your direct mail copy — are or have been involved with direct mail before, it is likely that they’ll look at a good appeal letter and see all the same things my scientist client saw: hyperbole, simplified language, lots of “you”, too much bold and underlines — things that academic writers are trained to avoid like the plague.

There’s a reason hopeful anglers like to hire guides when they go on a big fishing expedition: they want an expert to show them where the fish are and what they’re biting on. Rather than tossing their lines out and seeing what happens, they’re taking the expert’s advice and adapting it to their equipment.

Your direct mail program needs that same care. If you take bits of advice from every angler on the river, you’re not going to catch as many donors as you want.

Buy-in is great. But educated buy-in is better. So make sure anyone reviewing your direct mail letters has a good Direct Mail 101 course — or at least read an article like this one from Fundraising Success — before they toss in their line. And happy fishing!

Jul 062011
 

Get a new perspective when you walk away from work.

Why yes, I did recently write quite a nice post about perseverance and finding that one-legged-biker inspiration to keep you going in dark and frustrating times. But today, I want to write about giving up.

We’re taught to never give up. A host of voices from our childhood, our adolescence, and right on up into adulthood all exhort us to keep climbing that mountain, keep reaching for those stars, don’t give up. You can do it.

But sometimes, giving up is good. Especially when you’re writing.

In most projects, there comes a point at which you can’t figure out what’s not working. You might know what’s wrong or you might not. But clearly, something needs to change.

You can spend hours beating your head against the keyboard, forcing word after word onto the page. Or, you can try these four “I give up!” techniques:

Take a Walk

There’s a reason this is a tried-and-true suggestion for dealing with writer’s block — or any other kind of block, for that matter. A ten minute walk around the block can clear your head and get blood flowing to those parts of your body that can go a little numb after hours and hours hunched over the screen of your laptop.

Try a Change of Scenery

Speaking of laptops, if you don’t have one, get one! Then you can take it on the road — coffee shop, bar, extra desk at your buddy’s office…giving yourself the gift of unfamiliar surroundings can boost creativity and help you solve problems that seemed insurmountable when you’re staring at your same old scene.

Bake Something

Or learn to knit or build a birdhouse or play the piano. Doesn’t really matter what you do, as long as you funnel that creative energy into something totally different. Open new pathways, and you’ll be surprised where those new roads will take you in your writing.

Take a Nap

If it’s good enough for Einstein, it’s good enough for you! (Seriously, Google “famous nappers” — lots of powerful, creative people liked a good nap!) A ten minute power-nap can do wonders for recharging your mid-day batteries. Plus, I often find that while I’m sleeping, my brain keeps on working on those stubborn problems. And when I open my eyes, the solution is right in front of me.

Alright, I admit it. This post isn’t actually about giving up. At least not permanently. But it is about knowing when to walk away from a creative project and let it simmer for a while. Get some distance, find a new perspective, and enjoy the view for a while. Work will still be there when you get back.

 

Jun 272011
 

The other day, my 8-year-old asked me what I did at work. Patiently, I explained (again) that I write letters asking for money for organizations that help people. She rolled her eyes and said, “I know that! I meant what did you do today?” I told her that I worked on a letter for one of my clients. She heaved a big, 8-year-old sigh and said, “Yeah…but, well, do you just write the same letter over and over?”

Nearly every time I sit down at the computer and stare at the blank screen, it feels like a brand new mountain to climb. There are new facts to learn, new victories to share, new programs to ask for money for. Most of the time, I feel energized by the work that I do. Each letter is a new opportunity to delve deeper into an organization’s mission and to find new ways of telling their story.

But everyone has days where work feels like, well, work.

And one of the most important parts of my work is making sure I don’t write the same letter over and over. Believe me, donors can tell when you’re phoning it in. They know when your copy is less-than-inspired, and they respond by NOT responding.

So how do I keep it fresh each and every time?

  1. Micro-editing. Like all writers, I have words and phrases I favor. Organizations have those too. I combat all that boilerplate with aggressive line-by-line editing. A stronger word or a more active phrase can liven up even the most lifeless copy.
  2. Read it aloud. A direct mail letter is a personal letter from one individual at your organization to one donor. It should sound like that person talking to a friend. When you read it aloud, you can hear those boring recitations of facts for what they are: turn-offs. Bonus — you can also spot the complicated turns-of-phrase, the too-long sentences and the just-plain-awkward asks.
  3. Turn it on its head. Say something unexpected. Use a metaphor or simile that no one would anticipate. Ask a question that cuts to the heart of your issue (and leads the donor right to where you want them to go). Take advantage of literary techniques like assonance and alliteration. Make a pun. Unleash your creativity and see where it takes your letter. (You can always cut those bits that don’t work out, but taking the risk is bound to pay off now and then!)

I told my daughter a few more details about the letter I was working on that day — for an environmental organization — and it led to a great dinner-table discussion about conservation and natural resources. The next day, I heard her telling one of her friends, “My mom writes a lot of letters, but they’re not all the same, even though it kind of sounds like they could be.”

I couldn’t have said it better myself.

May 252011
 

There are hundreds of books out there that can teach you about the principles of great copywriting. But I find there are three simple rules — The Three R’s — that I turn to time and again when I need a little creative jump-start.

Make Your Writing Relevant

Nobody wants to be mailing an issue-based appeal on the wrong issue. So if you are an environmental organization mailing on conserving public lands, you don’t want your letter to hit two weeks after a major oil spill.

Chances are, you’re already paying attention to news relating to your mission (and if you’re not…well, you should be!). So make sure to apply that news to the copy you’re writing for your donors. Because if they’re interested in your mission, they’re probably paying attention — at least in a small way — to that news, as well.

If you know a relevant vote is coming up in Washington DC, try to time your mail to hit when news about that vote hits. If you have a newsletter featuring an issue you want to mail on, let the newsletter hit first so that your issue is already in the minds of your donors. And if a major news item happens to hit just as you’re preparing your letter to go out, make sure you acknowledge it (at the very least) in your communication with your donor.

Above all, make your mailings relevant — to your organization’s mission, your donor’s hopes and fears, and to the world happening outside your front door.

Make Your Writing Readable

Most of us have heard — and some lamented — that newspapers aim for their reports to be written at an 8th grade reading level. That’s probably a pretty good rule of thumb for direct mail fundraising letters, too. Use simple, short sentences and easy to understand vocabulary.

But it’s not just the way the piece is written that makes it readable. It’s also the way you put that text on the page. Short paragraphs rule in direct mail — normally no more than 4-5 lines. Toss in a couple of one-line paragraphs.

Try double indenting paragraphs you especially want people to read.

And I’ve said this before, but it bears repeating. Highlight your most important points, including your Ask. Use bold, italics, strikethrough or underlines to add emphasis. Ask your graphic artist to circle deadlines or other points that are tremendously important.

Anything you do that makes your letter easier to read is going to help push your donors through the letter and on to the reply form…and to their gift.

Make Your Writing Relatable

Remember, direct mail letters are personal letters from one person in your organization to one donor. Sure, many donors get that same letter, but you should always have one specific donor in mind as you’re writing. One copywriter I know keeps a photo of Edna, “his donor,” above his desk to remind him to always write specifically to her.

Sprinkle lots of I’s, You’s and We’s into your copy. Remind your donor that we’re all in this together. Reveal a personal hope or dream of the signer’s that relates to your organization’s mission. When donors see that there are real people behind the curtain, people who share their values and aspirations, they are more likely to give the first time and to stick with you for the long haul.

These personal touches, making your organization and the people who run it relatable, draw people in. Remember, it’s much harder to say “no” to a friend than to a faceless organization.

Remember these Three R’s as you’re drafting your fundraising letters, and you’ll have letters that work harder for you and your organization.

Need more examples? Have more questions? Post them in the comments!