Tips & Tricks: Letter Length

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Aug 102011
 

The other day, I sent an acquisition letter to the new development director at an organization I’ve worked with for several years. The letter had gone through the rounds with her predecessor, but we wanted him to make sure he was comfortable with the language, the tone, and most importantly, the facts as laid out in the piece.

His #1 comment? This letter is too long! Nobody’s going to read all that.

How long is too long?

The only good answer, of course, is as long as it needs to be. But there are a few general guidelines you can follow.

There was a time when 6-page letters were not unusual, but these days, most direct mail is 2 pages or 4 pages. Why not 3? Paper costs — there’s simply no good reason to have a blank page (the back of page 3) in your package. That’s space that could be better used to sell your cause or make your case. If you’re running 3 pages and can’t cut, make sure your margins are nice and big, your paragraphs short. Try adding one more testimonial, or a personal story from the signer. But don’t waste that last page!

A 2-pager

I like 2-page letters for simpler, more straightforward campaigns. Those that have easy-to-understand asks with no need for a lot of explanation or history work well in shorter letters. Urgent actions — we have 14 days to save this animal’s life!, for example — are perfect for 2-page letters.

Sometimes financial constraints can dictate a shorter letter. If you need to save money, getting rid of that second piece of paper is an easy way to do it. But make sure you can still make your case in those two pages.

A 4-pager

There’s a reason this has been the standard for so long: it works. No, people may not read every word, but they do skim through, and if they can see that you’ve used those four pages well — with testimonials, facts, a story or two, and urgency — they’ll feel good about giving to you, knowing that you are knowledgeable and passionate about your issue.

Especially when you’re introducing someone to your organization or asking them to take a specific action, it’s nice to have that extra space to tell them why their support is so important right now.

Test, test, test!

Letter length is a fantastic test. You may think your donors like the short-and-sweet letters you’ve been sending out, only to find out they really do respond better when you tell them more. Often, organizations “cheat” on letter length by narrowing the margins and running paragraphs together. Test and see if more air in your letter — even if it runs to 4 pages — bumps up response.

Conversely, if you’ve been sending out 4-page letters for years, you might save a bundle by switching it up to 2-pagers.

Many of my clients like to switch it up depending on a number of factors: how many people are getting the mailing (the smaller mailings often get 2-pagers to save on up front costs), the subject, the action required, the signer, the printing turnaround (there are some 2-page formats that can be turned around in 48 hours at the printer), etc.

The message

Above all, the message you’re communicating should drive the letter length. Donors don’t like it when you pad your letter with boring repetition, just so you can fill out 4 pages. And they don’t like feeling like you left out important details just to keep your page count down.

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3 Ways to Involve Your Donors

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Aug 042011
 

One of the easiest ways to get people fired up about your organization is to involve them directly in your work. Give them a piece of the action, and they’ll be that much more invested in your mission…which means they’ll invest in you.

So how do you get them involved? Try these three simple involvement devices that can work wonders:

Petitions

I work with a lot of activist causes, so one of my favorite involvement devices is the Petition. Petitions are win-win for organizations and donors. Your people make their voices heard, and you have a chorus behind you on some of your biggest issues.

A few of key points to consider when doing a Petition: first, it’s best if the Petition goes to someone your donors have heard of and who has the clout to make the change you’re asking for. The President, prominent members of Congress, corporate CEOs or business titans — these are all great targets. Second, make sure you’re asking for something sufficiently large enough to warrant a Petition. Your donors want to help you move mountains, not drive the truck around the block. Finally, make sure you deliver them as promised! Nothing zaps your credibility faster than collecting a stack of petitions that don’t ever make it out of your office.

Surveys

Nearly everyone loves a Survey. Like the Petition, this gives your donor the chance to make their opinion known. You can make it narrow by asking specific questions about one current issue your organization is working on, or you can ask a series of questions about the overall work your organization is doing, or, for current supporters, how you’re doing.

I like to include a survey toward the end of a Renewal series as a way of prompting late responders to finally renew — or say why they won’t. Two caveats: keep surveys short — 5-7 questions is best — and always use the final question to lead toward the gift.

Declarations

I’ve used this involvement device sparingly, but when you are launching a huge campaign, changing the direction of an organization, or pushing for policy change on a massive scale, a Declaration of Support can be a great involvement device.

Structured much like a Petition, a Declaration enables you to lay out your entire case in a few lines, then asks your donors to sign their support. You get donor buy-in for big campaigns or organizational changes, and donors get the satisfaction of being visionary leaders helping to guide and support exciting new endeavors. Again, it’s not for every campaign, but when you’ve got a blockbuster, a Declaration of Support might be just the thing to involve your donors.

One key point to remember: For all three of these involvement devices, about 1/3 to 1/2 of your responses may come back with no money. Don’t panic — these no-money responders have proven they care about your issue. They’ll reward you in the future if you keep giving them the chance.

There are many other kinds of involvement devices — from membership cards, to tear-off forms, and much more. But these are three of my favorites for nonprofits because they’re affordable and they invite your donors to become more invested in your mission than they were before.

What are your favorite involvement devices? Is there something else I should add to my bag of tricks? Post in the comments.

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It IS Personal

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Jul 282011
 

Direct mailer writers always talk about making our mail ”personal”. For us that means lots of “I, you, we”, using a conversational tone, and, quite often, fudging the rules of grammar a bit.

But the other day, a couple of things happened that reminded me that there is another way to keep things personal — something it’s all too easy to forget in this day and age of social media connections and conducting business by e-mail.

First, I ran into an acquaintance who runs an arts organization. She was thrilled because her group had just been notified that they were the recipients of a big grant. I congratulated her, and she told me this story:

“You know, we thought for sure we were out of the running this year. The group giving the grant just announced they were eliminating arts funding! So when I got word, I immediately called them up to say ‘thank you’. The man in charge of granting the awards told me that he had gone against the new policy specifically for us because he remembered meeting our Executive Director and having a great conversation with her at an unrelated event. Personal connections really do count!”

Do they ever.

A similar thing happened to me a couple of months ago. A client I’d been working with for a couple of years went through some restructuring. They completely reevaluated all of their old contracts with an eye on reinventing their program from the ground up. I fully expected to lose the business.

But the Development Director called me up and asked that I stay on, one of the few contractors asked to do so. Now, I’m sure my strong work ethic and quality product played a part in that decision. But the tipping point?

I took the time while on a vacation in their city to stop by and meet the gang at their office.

This wasn’t actually a calculated move on my part. At the time, I had no idea that they were planning on restructuring. I just wanted to be able to put faces to the e-mail addresses and conference call voices. But those couple of hours out of my vacation paid off.

Those face-to-face connections are important — maybe even more so now that so many of us do business with people across the country…or across the globe. It might take a little extra time and effort, but the payoff could make it all worth it.

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Angling for donors

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Jul 182011
 

It's hard work reeling in donors. Don't leave the fishing to amateurs.

The other day, I overheard a development professional I know telling a potential client, “I like to let board members have input into all direct mail copy.”

My alarm bells went off, and I wanted to jump in and offer all sorts of unsolicited opinions about that. But instead, I decided I’d just save them for you.

Now, he went on to explain that he likes to involve board members so they have buy-in to the direct mail program — a sort of “We’re all in this together, folks!” idea. I am all for inclusion and board buy-in.

In fact, I believe wholeheartedly that everyone involved in your organization, from the board president to the once-a-month volunteer, should know what’s going on in the organization and be able to communicate that.

But.

A few years ago, I wrote a letter for an organization run by a very respected, very intelligent scientist. He was widely published in prominent scientific journals and national newspapers and magazines. He was a great writer, and he hated the letter I wrote for them. Ripped it to shreds. He deplored the overly emotional tone and the use of 2nd person point-of-view. He was adamant that his donors would see through such a hackneyed ask and leave the organization in droves.

Naturally, I was upset. I had worked extremely hard getting the complex technical details in the appeal right and melding those with the kind of impassioned, personal plea I know works in direct mail.

The development staff and I sat down and discussed how to proceed, and eventually, we convinced the executive director to test his approach vs. my approach. The results were definitive in my favor.

Now, this guy was a Ph.D. He had a couple of decades of experience in writing about his subject on me. But he didn’t — at that time — know direct mail at all.

Unless your board members — or other people you’re asking to read your direct mail copy — are or have been involved with direct mail before, it is likely that they’ll look at a good appeal letter and see all the same things my scientist client saw: hyperbole, simplified language, lots of “you”, too much bold and underlines — things that academic writers are trained to avoid like the plague.

There’s a reason hopeful anglers like to hire guides when they go on a big fishing expedition: they want an expert to show them where the fish are and what they’re biting on. Rather than tossing their lines out and seeing what happens, they’re taking the expert’s advice and adapting it to their equipment.

Your direct mail program needs that same care. If you take bits of advice from every angler on the river, you’re not going to catch as many donors as you want.

Buy-in is great. But educated buy-in is better. So make sure anyone reviewing your direct mail letters has a good Direct Mail 101 course — or at least read an article like this one from Fundraising Success — before they toss in their line. And happy fishing!

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The Passion Behind the Ask

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Jul 112011
 

“Passionate people are the only advocates which always persuade. The simplest man with passion will be more persuasive than the most eloquent without.”

~Francois de La Rochefoucauld

You are the best advocate for your organization.

Which means that everyone at the organization – from the receptionist, to the IT person, to the program staff, to the Executive Director – is a fundraiser.

Daunted? Don’t be.

I’ve been writing direct mail fundraising letters for fourteen years. And as I’ve talked to countless staff members, trying to gather the information needed to produce a blockbuster piece, there’s one question I’ve learned to ask first:

Why are YOU so passionate about this issue/problem/organization?

Because when you’re trying to raise support – whether it’s time, money or energy – for your organization, you’re talking to people. And people want to hear the good stuff before putting that all-important signature on the check.

They want to be moved. They want to feel they can make a difference. They want to connect with their tribe and feel they’re part of something greater than themselves.

And if you’re trying to get their money (or time, or referrals, or anything else), you’ve got to convince them that you can give them what they want. The best way I’ve found to do that is to convey your passion.

That’s one of the things I love about direct mail. It’s personal, it’s impassioned, and it conveys key things about your organization, its mission and its issues in a concise and friendly way. While asking for money!

But that ask starts with your passion. After all, a direct mail letter is a personal letter from one person at your organization to one donor. That one donor — multiplied by the thousands of letters you send out — needs to sense your excitement about the cause, your commitment to working on it. They need to feel that YOU are absolutely convinced that your organization is the best for the job.

When they can feel every ounce of your passion in that ask, that’s when they are most moved to give.

So, what do you love about your work? And why should it matter to the rest of us?

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Tip: Photos in Direct Mail

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Jul 052011
 

The other day, a client asked what I thought about using photos in direct mail. I sat down to shoot off a couple-sentence answer and ended up writing several paragraphs about my experience with photos — the good, the bad and the complicated.

The next day, I stumbled across this article from Jeff Brooks at Future Fundraising Now, which could have saved me a lot of trouble if I’d found it earlier! I agree with his advice to test, test, test…but here are some other thoughts I shared with my client about photos.

The Good

When you find a photo that tells your story, use it. The story should be clear at a glance, or easily understood with minimal text. Color is best, but black and white or sepia can be effective for some photos. People and animals work better than things.

The Outer Envelope, the Letter and Inserts are the best places for photos. But if you’re going for an image on the envelope, it needs to be particularly strong. Remember, your number one goal with the outer envelope is to get it opened, so any photo you use has to be intriguing and compelling. And you need to follow up on that intrigue in your letter copy, or the people who open the envelope are going to feel cheated.

Offering a free gift? Include a photo of the gift. Inserts are great for this, and you see many organizations put the premium photo on the OE. But be careful that you’re not over-selling the premium to the detriment of the organization and your cause.

MercyCorps is one organization that uses photos well, as is NRDC — check them out.

The Bad

I have been involved in testing photos on OEs, letters, inserts and replies. Results were generally either even with no photos, or unimpressive, with a couple of exceptions like those noted above. It would be easy to assume that photos just don’t work, but the real story is this: BAD photos don’t work.

Photos of people standing around — even important people — are ineffective in direct mail. Got a photo of your executive director shaking hands with President Obama? Great! But please don’t put it in your direct mail. Landscapes often make beautiful photos, but they’re a difficult sell in direct mail…unless they tell that compelling story.

And even the best photos are no good if you have to run them so small that it’s hard to tell what’s in them.

Bottom line: if your photo isn’t going to entice a donor to give, then you’re better off without it.

The Complicated

If you’re running the photo in color, that will mean additional printing costs. Be sure to check to see if you need permission to reprint it, and what kind of attribution you need to supply. Using more photos means less room for copy, so if you have a wordy copywriter or an organizational tendency to include a lot of information in your letters, you’ll have to remember to cut.

I really do like using photos in direct mail. When done well, they can boost response and give your donors a great sense of what your organization is all about. But it’s important to choose the right photo, put it in the right place, and test, test, test!

 

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Three Ways to Keep Copy Fresh

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Jun 272011
 

The other day, my 8-year-old asked me what I did at work. Patiently, I explained (again) that I write letters asking for money for organizations that help people. She rolled her eyes and said, “I know that! I meant what did you do today?” I told her that I worked on a letter for one of my clients. She heaved a big, 8-year-old sigh and said, “Yeah…but, well, do you just write the same letter over and over?”

Nearly every time I sit down at the computer and stare at the blank screen, it feels like a brand new mountain to climb. There are new facts to learn, new victories to share, new programs to ask for money for. Most of the time, I feel energized by the work that I do. Each letter is a new opportunity to delve deeper into an organization’s mission and to find new ways of telling their story.

But everyone has days where work feels like, well, work.

And one of the most important parts of my work is making sure I don’t write the same letter over and over. Believe me, donors can tell when you’re phoning it in. They know when your copy is less-than-inspired, and they respond by NOT responding.

So how do I keep it fresh each and every time?

  1. Micro-editing. Like all writers, I have words and phrases I favor. Organizations have those too. I combat all that boilerplate with aggressive line-by-line editing. A stronger word or a more active phrase can liven up even the most lifeless copy.
  2. Read it aloud. A direct mail letter is a personal letter from one individual at your organization to one donor. It should sound like that person talking to a friend. When you read it aloud, you can hear those boring recitations of facts for what they are: turn-offs. Bonus — you can also spot the complicated turns-of-phrase, the too-long sentences and the just-plain-awkward asks.
  3. Turn it on its head. Say something unexpected. Use a metaphor or simile that no one would anticipate. Ask a question that cuts to the heart of your issue (and leads the donor right to where you want them to go). Take advantage of literary techniques like assonance and alliteration. Make a pun. Unleash your creativity and see where it takes your letter. (You can always cut those bits that don’t work out, but taking the risk is bound to pay off now and then!)

I told my daughter a few more details about the letter I was working on that day — for an environmental organization — and it led to a great dinner-table discussion about conservation and natural resources. The next day, I heard her telling one of her friends, “My mom writes a lot of letters, but they’re not all the same, even though it kind of sounds like they could be.”

I couldn’t have said it better myself.

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Tip O’ the Moment

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Jun 222011
 

Lapsed Donors

Lapsed donors — people who haven’t given to you for 24+ months — are some of your best prospects for giving. But you need to figure out how to treat them.

Some organizations continue to mail them Renewals or send them a particularly strong appeal, hoping to lure them (or guilt them) back into the fold.

But I like to put them into a Prospecting mailing with a specially tailored package that acknowledges their relationship with you but also has a more aggressive “sell” of the organization — reminding them why they joined in the first place. This segment routinely performs double that of an outside list.

The package does require a few tweaks:

  • Make sure you address them as a supporter or Member. No “Dear Friend” for these folks. Let them know right up front that you know who they are.
  • Citing victories in your letter? Thank them for their past support that made those victories possible.
  • When you’re telling the story of your organization, acknowledge that they have heard it before. You may remember… or As you well know… are great introductory phrases that let that lapsed donor know they’re remembered.
  • Don’t ask them to join; ask them to re-up and welcome them back into the fold.

Consider lapsed donors as estranged family members. They’re still part of the family…they just haven’t been around for dinner in a while. Reach out to them, remind them of those special family recipes they might have missed, and invite them to come on back.

What are your tricks for bringing lapsed donors back? Please share them in the comments!

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Tip O’ the Moment

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Jun 152011
 

Signing the Letter

Sometimes, who signs a fundraising letter (or e-mail) can be one of the most contentious points in planning a direct mail campaign. Which is funny because my answer is very, very simple.

The signer — and there should only be one! – should always be the person with the most name recognition on the particular issue you’re addressing in the mailing.

So why is this very simple thing so complicated to put into practice?

The reasons are endless. A nonprofit might have two figureheads (a President and an Executive Director, say) who both feel they should be the ones signing letters to donors. Or it could have one leader who is very well-known for one specific issue — even though the organization is working on several issues — who insists on signing everything. A nonprofit might have oodles of celebrity support, but be afraid to ask for celebrity signers. And on and on.

Organizations should consider each letter they send out as a new opportunity to bond with their donors. Which means they should think carefully about what issue will do that and who the best person in the organization is to address that issue.

In an organization with a particularly strong or charismatic leader, it might be that leader every time. In an organization that has two distinct audiences — say an activist human rights group with a strong education program — there may be one leader who is perfect for addressing the activists on the list, and one for the education supporters.

One environmental group I work for has a celebrity — in this case, an actor well-known for his environmental advocacy — sign a letter for them a few times a year, while the executive director signs everything else.

Above all, your letter should always have only one signer. Remember, fundraising letters are personal letters from your organization to your donor. They should speak directly to that ONE donor, person-to-person. And they can’t do that if they’re signed by two people.

 

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Ten Questions That Can Reinvigorate Your Fundraising

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Jun 132011
 

Wake Up! It's time to revitalize our efforts! (Plus, there might be cake.)

Wake Up!

Now that we’re seeing some sun in Portland, I’m ready to wake up and revitalize my creative and business efforts. Each day I spend a few minutes thinking about what’s working, what’s not working and what could I do even better.

Before the heat of summer does you in, try taking a similar ground-up look at your fundraising program.

Here are ten questions you should ask yourself — and (better yet!) several people in your organization — that will reinvigorate and refocus your fundraising program:

1. In 25 words or less, what does your organization do? By limiting yourself and your colleagues to 25 words, you get at the essence of what your organization does, the chewy center that hooks your donors and makes your work real to them. If you’re on the ball, you’ve already got a great elevator pitch worked up. That’s the kind of answer you’re looking for here.

2. What is your story? Everyone at your organization should know your story — how and why you were founded, what initial obstacles you encountered and what successes spurred you on, how you got from those beginnings to where you are today. Think of a traditional story arc and try to tell your own story in that way.

3. Who is your customer/donor and what distinguishes him/her? In order to craft a compelling fundraising letter, you need to know who you’re writing about and who you’re writing to. The same is true for your entire program. What kind of people benefit from the work you do? And what kind of people think that’s important? Look at your donor file — how old is your average donor? Male or female? Where do they live? How much money do they make? How much education do they have? Target your letter to your donors as much as you can for the best results.

4. Why is this work so important, and why are you passionate about it? This is the emotional core of what your organization does, the gut-punch that moves your donor and inspires him or her to give. Use as powerful language as you can muster — don’t hold back!

5. What problem are you trying to solve and what steps are you taking to solve it? Here’s the meat of your ‘Ask’ — the very reason for your letter to the donor. Be as specific as possible here. Will a $20 gift provide lunch for 5 underprivileged students for one week? If you have more than one problem to tackle, write them all down. You may not use all of them in every fundraising effort, but having them on hand will help in the future.

6. If you could have unlimited funding to do one thing for the organization/constituents, what would it be? We all have those “If I won the lottery…” fantasies. Well, here’s where you consider what life would be like if your organization won the lottery. You won’t include all of this in any one letter, but it’s an important exercise to dream big. What specific things could you and would you do if you had unlimited funds? Show your donors your vision, and they just might show you a larger gift than usual.

7. What does your work accomplish? For you personally? For one constituent? For many constituents? For the world? Donors want to hear that their contribution is accomplishing something important. Include a personal anecdote about a time you were moved or inspired by something your organization did. Tell the stories of people whose lives your donors have impacted through their gifts. Tell them how their support is changing the world!

8. Have you gotten feedback from constituents/donors? A couple of well-placed quotes from people who have experience with your organization can add a huge portion of credibility to your fundraising letters. Ask volunteers why they like being involved with your work, conduct a donor satisfaction survey, and write it down every time one of the people you help says a heartfelt thank you.

9. What is one big success you’ve had? One failure? Your successes add credibility to your organization. They show that you are able to do what you set out to do. Remind your donors every chance you get that you have a track record to accomplish what you’re asking them to fund. And while you may not want to include a failure in a letter to a donor, understanding failure and the opportunities that come from it is critical to your success.

10. What are the barriers to your success and how do you overcome these obstacles? It’s not always fun to sit down and think about those things that hold us back. But your donors want to hear that you have a clear view of the task before you and a strong and innovative plan to accomplish it.

Whether you’ve got a new development officer or consultant to acquaint with your work…you need an overhaul of your fundraising efforts…you’re trying something new in your direct mail or online fundraising…or you just want to inject new spirit into your fundraising program…answering these ten questions can help you reinvigorate yourself and your organization.

How do you recharge your fundraising? Any tricks I should know about? Please share them in the comments!

 

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